My current trend in writing is to treat it like bits of code. Debugging as time goes on (fixing spelling/grammarish issues).

Most of these poems will rest the way they are written, but given time and interest many will see a patches or 2 before it is over.

8.31.2005

we might be going down

we might be under water
for longer than expected
once the bottom hits
can we last the night
or do we sink
against the sliding sun
do we shift about
like mop water
in the bottom of a bucket
slosh
against the walls
too hard to hold back
the urge to inhale
fluid folds around the corners
of my lips
locked
shut
can't give in
the urge
floating
slowly
the surface tension holds
a beam of light
refracting
glints against my eye
socket
we might try again

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